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IELTS Solution Essay Band 9 Model with Useful Tips

The IELTS Solution Essay is a common essay to get in Writing Task 2. You will be given an issue in the essay question and then presented with one or two questions to answer. The questions will decide what your task is. Knowing your task is essential for a high score in Task Response, which counts for 25% of your marks. All essay lessons and model essays on my website for writing task 2 are for both Academic and GT writing task 2.

Types of IELTS Solution Essay

There are three kinds of IELTS solution essays.

Solution Essay

IELTS will give you a problem that exists in the world today and then ask you what solutions you can offer. There are various different wording for this. Below are three examples:

What solutions can you offer?
What measures can you suggest to tackle this problem?
How can this be resolved?

Cause Solution Essay

For this essay, you will be presented with a topic, such as increasing urban populations. You will then see two questions which ask you to give the causes of the problem and solutions to the problem. Instructions can often be paraphrased. Below are two examples:

What are the reasons for this? What solutions can you suggest?
Why is this happening? What can be done to tackle it?

Problem Solution Essay

This is less common and is often confused for the Cause Solution Essay so watch out and pay attention to the word. You will be presented with an issue, such as more people moving to urban areas for work. You will then see two questions. Below is an example of how those questions can be worded:

What problems does this cause?
What answer can you suggest to deal with it?

IELTS Solution Essay Tips

Identify the type of solution essay you have.
Spend time analysing the topic given. Most people rush to form their ideas and don’t prepare supporting points. This is a mistake. Planning is crucial. You are being marked on your ideas and how they are explained and illustrated so spend a few minutes making sure you’ve got it all planned.
Once your ideas are formed, think about how to organise them into paragraphs and how to organise supporting points within the paragraph. Many people think that only paragraphing is marked for organisation, but actually the order of supporting points is also marked. Your aim is for coherence.
Think about language. How will you paraphrase words for the topic and what words will you use to express solutions and causes (if required). Poor paraphrasing (risky paraphrasing) is one reason people fail to get band 7 in their Vocabulary for writing task 2.
Always have an introduction, body paragraphs and conclusion. Never ever miss the conclusion. Always make sure you have time to write it.
Pay attention to the content and length of paragraphs in the model essay below. All the model essay on my website are safe to use as a guide for how to write your IELTS essay. Even for people aiming for band 9, they are still safe to use.

IELTS Solution Essay Model Answer

Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

A large number of criminals who serve their first prison sentence, leave prison only to reoffend. This is mainly because of the lack of rehabilitation and difficulty finding regular employment once released. There are a number of solutions which should be implemented to deal with criminals who reoffend.

Firstly, the reason for most first-time offenders committing crimes again, once they have been released from prison, is due to the lack of rehabilitation whilst in prison. In other words, offenders are not given a chance to retrain and learn new skills for their future or develop a deeper understanding of correct moral behaviour and instead mix with other criminals, which only strengthens their criminal intentions. Secondly, repeat offending is also owing to the difficulty in finding employment after being released. As a result, many of them struggle financially which leads them back to crime, regardless of the consequences.

There are two effective solutions to the problem of repeat offenders. One way to tackle this is to ensure that all criminals entering prison are given the chance to retrain with useful skills which will hopefully ensure them a job after they have served their sentence. By doing this, it will help them reintegrate back into society and give them some means of supporting themselves financially. Another method of dealing with criminals who reoffend is to have more supervision and checks in place when they are back in society. This solution would hopefully prevent them from taking any chances and deter them from reoffending because they are being so closely watched.

In conclusion, regardless of the reasons for reoffending, having skills training and education in prison as well as closer observation for newly released offenders can be effective in preventing criminals from committing crimes again.

VOCABULARY FOR THIS TOPIC: Word List for Crime & Punishment Topic

Examiner Comments: This essay addresses the task completely. All parts of the essay question have been covered with relevant ideas. Both causes and solutions have been well-explained. Ideas are logically organised and there is a flexible use of linking devices, which help sign post the direct of the essay. There is a range of sentence structures and also tenses. Vocabulary is also flexible with a good range of less common words that allows for precise meaning. Essay Length: 290 words

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Hi Liz, I have a question here.

For the problem & solution question, i always write one paragraph for problems and another for solutions.

However, is my solution provided need to be relate to solve the problem i stated in previous paragraph? are both paragraph need to be related to each other?

You need to consider whether you are writing about causes and solutions or problems and solutions. Those are two different essays. If you are asked about causes, then the solutions are not always directly related to those causes. In such an essay, IELTS will give you the problem and ask you to give causes of that problem and also solutions of that problem – this means the causes and solutions are not always directly connected. But if you are asked to write about problems and solutions, then the solutions will usually be linked to those problems.

Thanks Liz, you understand my question perfectly!

yes, i’m asking about ‘problem and solution’ types question, but i get confused with ’cause and effect’ types question. I know how to differentiate now, thanks again 🙂

Cause and effect essays do not involve solutions. Causes are the reason something happens. Effects are the consequences, not the solutions. So, if the essay is about the mass movement of people from the countryside to cities, and you are asked about the causes and effects, you would write about reasons for this event and the problems than come from that event. No solutions are needed. So, ultimately, there are a number of essay types: – solutions only – causes and problems (effects) – causes and solutions – problems and solutions I actually have all my materials ready to make an advanced lesson about these types of essays, buy my health is still preventing me from making videos frequently. Hopefully next year will be better for me and I’ll get the video made.

hi liz, I have been using chatgpt to analyze me essays but u said its useless so what other ways i can use to evaluate them. kindly guide me

AI can look at the accuracy of vocabulary and grammar, which for IELTS writing counts for only 50% of your marks. It cannot assess style, tone or other issues with content. It is also not 100% accurate with grammar or vocabulary. For example, when a word is both a noun and a verb (for example, the word “decrease”), it struggles to see the errors in usage. So, it can help you to some extent with language, but just remember it isn’t completely accurate. And of course, it cannot assess specific IELTS marking criteria, such as Task Response or Coherence & Cohesion, which count for 50% of your marks. As you see from previous comments, it gave a mark of 5.5 for an essay which is a much higher band score – it cannot be used to assess IELTS writing properly. However, for writing that is not IELTS, such as a work email or letter, it can be useful to use chatgpt as a simple language review or for language suggestions, but accuracy is not 100%.

Thank you liz!

Hello Liz, I love your content and welcome back!

I wrote an essay to the topic you provided here “many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment. why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?”

This is my essay: Majority of offenders often recommit and serve their sentence again. This is mainly because of the lack of rehabilitation and difficulty finding regular employment after the release. There are various solutions to consider when dealing with criminals who reoffend.

Firstly, the reason for the most first-time offenders committing crimes again would be neglecting their psychological counseling processes and creating areas for personal development. After committing a crime, there is not enough space for them to deal with the negative emotions such as hopelessness and anxiety by finding what they care about. Additionally, due to the difficulties they experience while finding a new job after their release, they may not handle their economically disadvantaged condition which mostly results in feeling despairing and committing crime again.

There are various considerable solutions to handle this issue. First one is to ensure that there are enough areas for inmates to improve and keep themselves with meaningful tasks during their sentence time. The more there are various * to offer, the more prisoners find what really interests them. Secondly, possible regulation of the laws towards employment for former prisoners can be done. Without risking the society’s safety, it should be comparatively easier for them to find a new job after their release. Through this approach, they could feel more hopeful about their future.

In conclusion, among many reasons such as neglect in self improvement areas of inmates and difficulties they experience in the job hunt process, prisoners can recommit a crime. With possible solutions such as improving their personal development processes and easing the employment for them, this issue can be solved.

when i ask chatgpt, it says i would get this 5.5 from this essay. do you think its correct? 🙁 what may be your suggestions

This is not a note for everyone – DO NOT USE CHATGPT TO ASSESS IELTS. IELTS has specific marking criteria of which 50% if not language based and can only be assessed by a professional, trained examiner.

Although my website does not offer a feedback service, I do have time for a few comments:

1) You’ve got the right structure and you have clear signposting (linking). However, your link is s slightly repetitive, such as “firstly / first”. Don’t use both. Change one to “one effective measure is…”. 2) Review your background statement in the introduction. It’s a little bit too short and doesn’t fully paraphrase the topic given. Be careful in writing too concisely and missing out clearer meaning. 3) Be more mindful of how you phrase your ideas. Your first reason is not well explained. You need to state specifically, that the problem is when the criminals are in prison – prisons do not offer counselling etc. If you don’t state that you are referring specifically to prisons, then it doesn’t make sense. IELTS is all about being very clear and very specific. Don’t presume the examiner will understand – if you haven’t explained it properly, you’ll get a lower score.

Otherwise, you’re doing well. You’ve got language errors, but you’ve also got some great vocabulary and you can use complex sentences reasonably well. My aim is to help you develop, not provide band scores. However, I will say that as I mentioned before chatgpt is useless (totally and utterly useless – in fact a waste of time) for IELTS – this essay is certainly well above 5.5.

This is a link to the main writing task 2 section of my website with tips, essay topics and model essays: https://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-task-2/

Hello Liz, I love your blog; it is very helpful. Thank you for helping people like us. I have my exams coming up soon and writing is my weakness. Please could grade this essay for me, what band does it lie, and what can I do to improve on it? Thank you!

The only way to improve safety on our roads is to give much stricter punishments for driving offences. What extent do you agree or disagree?

Several measures have been implemented by the government to reduce accidents in our roads, and one such measure, is making sure that driving offenses are punished accordingly. I do agree that more stricter punishments should be put in place.

Light punishments can be taken advantage of by people who can afford them, when they don’t change the status quo of people’s lives and especially when such punishment is monetary based. Punishment against speeding tickets, not obeying traffic lights and stop signs, are mostly monetary based punishments. It is believed, this type of punishment is less effective, given the amount of money a person is required to pay when such offences are committed. Instead, the government should commit heavier fines, to ensure the offenders feel the pinch in their pockets.

For offences such as driving without a driver’s license, and no proof of motor vehicle insurance, and driving under the influence of alcohol, should result in retraining, losing your license or vehicle, serving a short jail term, and the offender taken to a mandatory rehabilitation center for substance abuse. It has also been proposed in certain circumstances, drivers should be made to lose their jobs or rights to do business.

Furthermore, for offences that results in bodily harm to other people or loss of life, heavy penalties of large sums of money or longer jail term should be constituted.

In conclusion, stricter punishments such as heavier financial charge, losing driving license, retraining, jail term and lose of work will discourage drivers from committing these offences and consequently making our roads much safer.

Although I don’t offer a feedback or marking service, I will make a couple of very quick comments. 1) Analyse the precise words in the question more carefully. A driving offence is about drink driving or driving without a licence, for example. It is not about something that results in a crime. So, this isn’t about hitting someone or kill them. 2) Each body paragraph is about your own personal opinion so writing “it is believed that…” isn’t about what you think, it’s about what is believed by others so it isn’t used in an opinion essay (unless it is in the background statement of the introduction which actually does relate to other people’s opinions). 3) More serious than the above two points is your third body paragraph. The requirements of Task Response are that no main idea is less developed than another. So, each BP should be about the same length. 4) Lastly, you have a sentence in body paragraph 2 (first sentence) which is 49 words in length and too packed with too many supporting points. Control your sentence length and don’t push all idea into your essay – be selective and explain things clearly. You don’t get a higher band score because you’ve filled a paragraph with a list of ideas, but rather because you’ve take the time to explain one in detail.

IELTS essays are specific types of essays for this exam only. They are different to other essays that you might write in university or elsewhere. See my advanced lessons to learn the right techniques: https://elizabethferguson.podia.com/

Thank you very much Liz!.

Liz, In this response, i have included your tit bits. Please would check again?

Some people believe that exploring outer space is important because it expands human knowledge and might lead to discoveries that will benefit humanity in the future. Other people believe that space exploration is a waste of money that could be better spent solving immediate problems here on earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Outer space exploration has captured the interest of both government and private sectors. It is an area with intrigue and offers opportunity to expand human knowledge and discoveries. While some people might see investing in space exploration as a waste of money, I do believe it has benefits that should not be ignored.

Private companies such as Space-X are exploring the possibility of space tourism. The thought of regular people doing space walks, getting closer to other planets, landing on Mars or the Moon, is captivating and will be a treat to those who can afford it. Research on reusable rockets where a rocket can be launched more than once as opposed to the usual use and dump, will make it easier to ferry many people to and from space frequently and efficiently. Soon, I believe many private companies will join in the race thereby creating competition and as a result lowering the cost of space exploration to appoint where it will be affordable by ordinary people. It will be like flying to another country.

In addition, space exploration provides possibility of future Asteroid mining. These are breakaways rocks from nearby planets and beyond. These rocks can be mined, but to do so, we must figure out ways and means and space exploration is the answer. I believe these rocks contain rare metals and minerals that we do not have here on earth or can replace the ones we have depleted because of over mining. Most of these natural resources have aesthetic value and commonly used for personal beautification, in construction, and in places regarded for royalty. Furthermore, they are needed to further research in medicine and help advance our technological space here on earth.

In conclusion, while it might seem to some people that investing in space exploration is a waste of resources and money, there are several advantages we can drive from it such as space tourism, asteroid mining, re-usable rockets, and Mars colonization.

You write so well and your English is really strong. You’ve got the right structure now. Your issue is going to be Task Response. This essay is an opinion essay which requires your direct opinion and a full explanation of it. There were two sides mentioned A) space research is good because it expands knowledge and leads to discoveries B) it is a waste of money using money that can be spent on other things. You do need to address both to some extent. Obviously you have focused on agreeing it is beneficial. But I don’t feel you have fully convinced me that spending money on space research is better than spending it on education, health care, poverty etc. In your whole essay, only one sentence at the end of body paragraph 2 convinces me of your argument and that relates to research in medicine. So, this means, you decided your opinion and then never re-read the essay question again to ensure you are addressing all aspects of it. This is one of the fatal mistakes people make.

This isn’t just an essay about the advantages of space research. It is the advantages of space research over spending money on health care or poverty etc. For example, a lot of space research has lead to developments in technology, which then lead to things such as the infrared ear thermometer. So, ideas about space tourism and beautiful rocks as a reason not to spend money on poverty and health care won’t work as a strong essay for IELTS. If you get a topic like this and struggle to think of reasons why space research is more beneficial than tackling poverty or other social issues, change your opinion and argue against it. Be strategic when you make your choices. I do cover the topic of Space Research (pros and cons) in my Ideas for IELTS Essay Topics E-book, which you can find in my store: https://elizabethferguson.podia.com/ . It also contains ideas for over 150 essay topics that appear year after year in IELTS.

Thank you Liz! I will try post another essay later address your observations. By the way, how many points is Task Response worth?

If you go to this page: https://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-task-2/ you’ll find a link to the band score and marking criteria for task 2. Read the page carefully because you should never take the test until you know precisely what you are marked on. This includes for the speaking test as well. You’ll find a link for task 1 marking on this page: https://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-task-1-lessons-and-tips/

Hi Liz, Could you please answer my question? In the sample essay, you wrote both causes in one paragraph. Is it correct? I was taught that one paragraph should contain only one idea, which is written in the topic sentence. Also, how many causes and solutions should I write? Is it okay to write one cause in first paragraph and one solution in the second paragraph?

These are all good questions.

If you look at the band score descriptors published by IELTS and look at the marking criterion of Coherence & Cohesion (which is about paragraphing and linking), it doesn’t say “one central idea” for each paragraph, it says “a central theme”. Most teachers paraphrase this to students as “one idea” because it’s easier to explain and understand it that way, but that isn’t the full picture. It is really about one theme. For an Opinion Essay where you must present points supporting your opinion, each body paragraph will tackle one point which is actually one main idea. But for advantages/disadvantages or cause/solutions essays, each body paragraph will tackle all your advantages or all your solutions or all your causes. These are grouped together into one body paragraph as a central theme. So, putting all your causes together is logical, organised and follows the higher level band score requirements of having a central theme.

About your other point of how many causes you need, certainly if you have only one cause then your whole paragraph will focus on that and your next body paragraph can focus on solutions, in which you may have one or two solutions. It is not recommended to have more than two causes or two solutions because your aim is to extend and develop each point sufficiently for a high score so having more than two doesn’t really allow you to do this.

Thank you so much for your answer. I was confused for so long, but you made it much clearer for me.

It is true that punishment do not deter offenders from committing more crimes There are several factors contributing to this but government can certainly take steps to address these issues.

On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why people keep committing crimes even after punishment. Firstly, unemployment issues can be a factor to this. In other words, offenders who are unemployed are likely to repeat or commit another crime after serving their punishment if they do not have anything doing to bring them income. As a results of making earns meet some may be tempted to steal in order to meet this demand. Secondly, neglection can be another factor why offenders keep committing crimes. For example, an ex-convict is likely to be rejected and stigmatized by society and this individual can find him or herself back into prison due to lack of love and support from friends and family.

On the other hand, measures such as government creating jobs can go a long way to tackle this problem. For example, if the government support ex-convicts through job creation and other beneficial programs, it will help reduce crimes as these people will be busy with their work schedules and business activities. Another point to consider is to educate the public about stigmatization and also encourage family and friends to provide support i.e physically, emotionally, psychologically and financially to these people for them to feel loved and accepted back into the society. This can help prevent them from going back to offenses that might end them up in prison.

In conclusion, factors such as unemployment and neglection can increase crimes in society, however, various methods can be put in place to solve this problem.

Dear Liz I hope you are doing well. I apologize for getting straight to the point with my question. For this solution essay, do I only need to write the solution in the conclusion without addressing the cause? The title mentions both the cause and conclusion, so I am a bit confused.

Sometimes it isn’t possible summarise all supporting points for the causes and all supporting points for the solutions in a short conclusion. And of course, you don’t want a long conclusion because it’s a waste of time and doesn’t help your score. So mentioning some ideas specifically and then referring in general to the others is the best way. I’ve just edited the above conclusion in the essay above for you to show you a good way to resolve this problem. Take a look again at the essay.

hi mam! if i am asked to give only solutions, how many remedies do i have to write down? and how can i place my solutions in both paragraphs ? should i put them into single para? or should each para have only one remedy? could you please clarify this?

If you are asked for solutions only, each body paragraph will contain one solution. All paragraphing is based on logical organisation.

Hello Liz, I hope you’re doing well.

Firstly, thank you for your channel; it has been very beneficial for me during my IELTS preparation!

The question I want to ask is, I think I’m confusing solution essays with opinion essays. For example: “Mental health is becoming an increasingly important topic in society. What do you think are the main contributing factors to mental health issues? How can individuals and communities promote mental well-being?”

I initially thought it was a solution essay, but now I believe it should be an opinion essay. I would be thrilled if you could help me with this.

Thanks for everything!

This is one of the problems when you try to give a name to every type of instructions. An opinion essay is when you are given a statement that is an opinion, such as “Some people think fast food should be banned to reduce the number of obese people.” This is an opinion from “some people”. An opinion essay will ask you to present your opinion as a response – do you agree? / to what extent do you agree? / do you agree or disagree? / what is your opinion?. For these types of essays, you must present a clear opinion such as “I believe that banning fast food is a good method but not the most effective because there are other ways to reduce obesity.” (that is a clear opinion). If you don’t present a clear side, a clear position, a clear opinion, you will get a low score. Any why do we use “I” or “my opinion” – it’s because we are separating “some people think” and “I think” – we are separating two opinions in the same paragraph – one that belongs to other people and one that belongs to you. If you didn’t do this, having two opinions in the same paragraph gets confusing.

However, if the instructions only say “What do you think are the main causes” – you are not being asked to evaluate. You are not being asked to present your opinion of someone else’s opinion. You are not being asked for a position. You are not being asked “do you agree with this solution?”. You are only being asked to give causes. So, whether the instructions say “What are the causes” or “what do you think are the causes” – it’s the same. You only need to present two causes (usually two). So, whether you write “I think stress and poor work-life balance are the causes ….” or “stress and poor work-life balance are the causes …” – it’s the same answer. You’ve given the causes.

So, the only real task you have to do is follow the instructions and understand what your aim is with the essay. Try not to get into a panic about the names given to essay types by teachers.

hello Liz thanks for your ideas and i need one of the introduction that i can use all kind of essays such as adventage and disadventage , problem solution , agree and disagre or etc. please reply my comment .thanks for your answer.

You will need to go to a teacher who teaches such terrible things. There is no one sentence or introduction for all essays, unless you are happy with band 5.5 or under. If you want band 6 or above, you’ll need to learn techniques for introductions for each type of task 2.

Dear Liz, Thank you for this clarification…… To my mind, one of the principal hardships that candidates are subjected to is to identify CORRECTLY what is being asked from them in the written part. IELTS is a sophisticated test. Considering that your level of English is O.K, then your main obstacle is to stay sharp (after 1.5 hours of screen time already) and apply the right essay format to the question. Unfortunately, losing focus and addressing the essay inappropriately, might result in band scores below 7. Lads, read the questions carefully, underline facts and what is being asked, write down supporting points (each paragraph presenting a single idea), organise those logically. God Almighty please help us! I wish i’d found this website earlier. God bless your heart Liz <3

Hello Liz, I hope you are doing well and that your health has improved. First of all, thank you for everthing, you are an outstanding person. I have a question please, in problem and solution type, should problems be in one paragraph and solutions in another ? or can i write a problem and its solution in a paragraph and the another problem with its solution in the second paragraph ? Thanks in advance

There is right or wrong in this case. You are being marked on logical organisation rather than a fixed organisation. So, both would be possible.

In this contemporary world, there is an increase in the number of criminals significantly after serving their first prison sentence. They intended to commit more crimes due to a lack of moral behavior rehabilitation at the prison or results from difficulty in getting jobs because of poor skills performance. However, there are many solutions to prevent crime by helping them to get a job. Also, training them to learn new skills.

Firstly, several factors lead to crime inside the prison, its environment and contact with other prisoners have a major impact on the criminal’s mental and physical behavior. For example, they learn from the lousy prisoner how to deal with the drug abuser and sell it. Therefore, there is an increase in offensive crimes. Secondly, the criminals do not have financial support, and face difficulty getting a job, even when they are employed, their jobs are usually of low wages, and they cannot afford their living expenses. All these factors play a role in criminals intending to re-offend. There are Nemours solutions to tackle these issues. Initially, the prisoner should be educated and rehabilitated with moral behavior and treated for psychological problems such as depression or anxiety. Lastly, the prisoner must train to gain skills. To illustrate that, improving them in computer skills or construction building. That leads to getting better jobs and becoming dependent on their self. In addition, the government should be supporting them financially to prevent crime. In conclusion, after careful analysis of this problem and recommended different solutions. All these measurements will help to decrease the number of the crime.

Great essay. Well done 👍🏾

Even though prisons are set up to reduce further crimes in the first place, it is common for first time offenders to carry out more crimes once they have been released. This essay will examine the main reasons of recidivism and possible solutions for this problem.

Prisons as criminal school and their focus on retribution rather than rehabilitation are the two main drivers of relapse in criminality once released. Firstly, incarceration gives opportunities for inmates to meet with other like-minded people, bulking up their criminal skills which can later be used for future crimes. For example, a bank robber in lock-up can swap stories with other bank robbers, making them better bank robbers in the future. Furthermore, most of the prisons worldwide simply lock people up while little or no attention is given in reforming convicts into good people who have a deep understanding of correct moral behavior. In other words, most ex-prisoners lack means and tools necessary to survive in the society after their release. For instance, lack of skills for finding jobs ultimately leads to them struggling financially which leads them back to crime, regardless of the consequences.

Two of more possible addresses to this issue include establishments of reentry programs and the government providing subsidies for newly released prisoners. If reentry programs which emphasize on occupational trainings, social trainings and drug and alcohol rehabilitations are available to those serving terms, the likelihood of carrying out further criminal activities will definitely be less. The chance of ex-prisoners standing on their feet after the life behind bar depends on the ability of the government to provide aids and reliefs to them. Hence, the national and structured supports will be beneficial in preventing recidivism.

To conclude, prison environments can be criminogenic while focusing on nurturing prisoners to survive after the sentences will reduce the number of people committing more crimes after their time spent in captivity.

Many criminals, who serve their first-time punishment, offend after they are being released from prison due to the lack of rehabilitation and difficulty in finding a job once they are released. There are several solutions which should be implemented to deal with criminals who reoffend.

Firstly, most of first-time offenders tend to commit more crimes once they are released due to the lack of rehabilitation during their staying at prison. Those criminals are not given the chance to retrain and improve their skills or even to develop their moral behavior. Instead, they are mixed with other criminals who can strengthen their criminal intentions. This makes those criminals offensive and just thinking of committing crimes rather than doing good deeds. Secondly, when these criminals are released, they will face financial issues since they don’t have experience and skills to let them work in a job. Thus, they start looking for a source of money, but the only way to collect money is by committing more crimes such as stealing, fraud, or even murdering. This leads to the reoffending cycle again.

A lot of criminals getting out of prison tend to commit more crimes than before they were first arrested. This phenomenon can be caused by the unhealthy environment in which they were held during the time serving their crime. A solution to this problem would be to ensure a better mental health for prisoners expecting to be released and to continue follow them once they are out.

The poor conditions in which prisoners are being held does not help them understand their mistake. On the contrary, an environment of violence persists between the criminals, as many fights and aggressions happen within the establishment. For example, a person that was arrested for a minor crime, such a dealing drug, will be influenced in a bad way by other more dangerous criminals. Therefore, when getting out of jail, instead of having grown from the punishment, the former drug dealer will be transformed into a rapist or a murderer.

To counter this issue, it is essential to introduce a system of therapy for the prisoners. As they understand the consequences and the gravity of their actions, and as they learn to combat their negative inner thoughts, these criminals will become better people. After that, it is also crucial to follow them for a few months once they reintegrate society to make sure they do not repeat their actions. This can be done by tracking them with a foot bracelet.

To conclude, the presence of violence in prisons is what pushes prisoners to become more dangerous. Helping them evolve and growing mentally is the best way to make their return to society safe for everyone.

There is no doubt that first time criminals commit same or different crime again after coming out of jail. In this essay, I will discuss the reason for this and what could be done to solve this problem. When lawbreaker goes to prison, first time, they are not rehabilitated properly, and lesson is not learned for them. They are not trained for any skill which can help them outside to apply for a job. On top of this, when they are mixed with other criminals, they encourage them for more crimes. Its like they found what they wanted, the same mentality people. Also, these people are not scared of law because of many loopholes in the law, which they use to come out of this, and some time punishment is not that severe, and this results in fearless criminals. There could be multiple steps can be taken by government and the society. Firstly, Government should consider making the law stricter which can bring fear among criminals and deter them from committing crime again. Secondly, when first time prisoner serves jail term, he should properly rehabilitate so that he can understand the difference between good and wrong. He should also understand the moral values of society. Rehabilitation should also include training for some important skills, which can enable them to get job outside. If he is not trained for any skill, he will remain the same person and will be very easily attracted to commit crime again for his needs like money or food. Finally, criminals should be categorized depending on their crimes and criminals with less intensity crime like pick pocketing shouldn’t be mixed with criminals with high intensity crimes like murder. In conclusion, prison should be place for bringing moral improvement in prisoners and making them better person and not only completing the punishment terms. If these solutions are implemented by government, the crime rate would drop significantly.

A huge number of prisoners often commit more crimes after being released from prison and this is due to lack of proper rehabilitation and inability to secure a sustainable employment and a means of livelihood. However, there are solutions to this problem of repeated crimes of offenders after serving their first punishment.

Firstly, there is a need for adequate retraining of prisoners with relevant skills before needed to sustain them after being released; this will go a long way in checkmating their excesses upon integration with other people in the society. Furthermore, assisting them with finances to help build on the skills learnt will be of great help in cubing this problem.

Secondly, offenders released should be gainfully employed so that they don’t become a threat to other persons. In addition, they can also be assisted to start up a business and proper supervision for a period of time, this is to ensure that they don’t do otherwise from the trainings and support they have received. Finally, If a thorough and proper mental rehabilitation is extensively carried out on offenders while in prison and armed with the relevant skills needed, repeated crimes will be reduced to the barest minimum In conclusion, If a good number of persons have a means of earning a living, crime will be thing of the past, so all efforts is to ensure that people are highly engaged in meaningful ventures so avoid crimes even

There are two effective ways for dealing with first-time offenders. One way is to ensure that each offender entering prison must be retrained. The government should prepare a working environment for those criminals to improve their skills and give them experience in a field that will help them in assisting themselves in the future. In addition, a series of lectures must be given to develop their moral behavior. Another way for reducing the number of criminals from reoffending is by keeping an eye on them after they are being released from prison. This will frighten those criminals from committing crimes because the police or the government are watching them closely. In conclusion, retraining criminals by engaging them in jobs and giving them awareness lectures in addition to keeping an eye on them after they are released would hopefully solve the problem of reoffending criminals. If government applies these solutions, crime figures would soon drop.

The reoccurrence of crime after convicts serves their first punishment made the legal process that they ought to go through before returning to society seems ineffective, making it logical to question jail time and a necessity to keep track of offenders reintegration in order minimize the possibility of them breaking the law again.

Firstly, the significant number of people reoffending after getting caught is mainly due to the difficulty of finding a job as past offenders, and with having no source of income prior to spending time with other criminals, it gets harder for ex-felons to follow the law as they been wired mentally to see pass the rules in order to survive in prison. For example, a case that made controversy in Algerian newspapers told the story of a guy that been jailed for a minor drug use felony, and had to turn to drug dealing in order to put food on his table as reintegration made impossible to him and to a lot of cases that were faced with the similar faith.

The inefficiency of juridical punishment as a way to prevent crime from reappearing made it clear that the missing piece of the puzzle was reintegration programs, that aim at providing newly released prisoners with jobs and following their progress in the period that follows their release, such programs are already present in the USA and they proved to be the best approach to deal with such issue.

in conclusion, the high rate of crime among ex-offenders and skepticism with regards to traditional ways of dealing with this phenomenon put the light on the importance of re-integration programs as a key solution to make these people good citizens again.

My take on the essay :

After several months or years of serving punishment for their criminal activities, many offenders face difficulty in leading a normal life.In the face of public eye, once an offender always an offender whom they believe has a higher tendency to repeat their crimes. Upon exiting the correction center, offenders need to earn money to pay for their accommodation, bills, buy groceries, food and other necessities.

However, finding a job with past criminal records is a big challenge and struggle for the offenders. Many people wouldn’t immediately employ anyone with such criminal records, because they will have trust issues with the offenders. For instance, any offenders having past criminal activities such as frauding, stealing, or even attempted murder, the employers would be afraid to hire them as the offenders may repeat their crimes. Additionally, the offenders wouldn’t have enough past experience or the right skill needed for the job.Hence, from an employer’s perspective they wouldn’t want to hire people from such a criminal background and least experience instead of regular people.

Similar trend is observed in landlords who deny leasing an apartment or rental units to offenders due to the same reasons. Therefore, upon facing many hurdles and embarrassment in continuing a regular life, offenders resort to crimes to feel empowered over the judgements thrown by the public.

In order for this cycle of crimes to stop from happening, the government needs to take several measures to correct this issue. Firstly, job training and general handy skills can be taught to offenders in the correction center which will be useful for job application in the future. Secondly, offenders should be given a chance to continue their education by distance learning so they are equipped with necessary skills and knowledge. Thirdly, to tackle the accommodation problem, the government can allocate a housing allowance or prepare a housing center for anyone having trouble finding a stay upon their release.

In summary, if the government is able to provide a protection plan for the offenders after their release, this group of people will not repeat their crimes, hence able to break the cycle of second crimes. Also, society needs to create awareness to treat these offenders equally as regular people instead of judging them for their past actions.

Use criminals, transgressors, law breakers etc

It is true that a considerable amount of criminals commit more crimes after they finish their first sentence. There’re various reasons behind this phenomenon, and I believe the prison administrative and society should both take measures to tackle the problem. It is often the case that poverty leads to crimes. Some people may commit crimes such as stealing or fraud because they are poor and need money to survive. Moreover, poor people may not have enough money to go to school and thus are deprived of the chance of learning useful skills and getting a good job. If these conditions are not improved when they go out of prison, they might find themselves in a dilemma to solve the problems by crime again. Some may even get worse influences in prison, owing to the lack of discipline and guidance there. Prison is always filled with dangerous and violent people, who might be a bad influence on other minor-crime offenders. There’re several means to help mitigate the problem. Firstly, Government should provide some prisoners with essential education and help them learn useful skills. Therefore when they finish their sentence, they can try to find a decent job with the skills they learned, without having to go back to crimes to serve themselves. This will also help them blend into society and build healthy relationships, which also decreases the chance of committing crimes. Secondly, Prisons should conduct stronger disciplines to constrain violent behaviors. In this way, prisoners can serve time in a peaceful environment and have more time to reflect on their wrongs. In conclusion, offenders commit crimes after serving time is not only because of the bad environment in prison but also because the lack of education and social support for them to earn a living by proper skills. Government should take various measures to tackle the problem.

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.

What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

In recent days the cases of obesity are tremendously rising up at the same, their fitness and health is dramatically declining. In this essay im going to give a brief explanation about causes and solutions.

On the one hand, intake of junk food and avoiding appropriate nutritional foods are major reason to cause obesity. firstly, presence of high level of fats components in oily food leads to gain bad cholesterols in body. To illustrate, those who consume high level of oil foods are encountering with obesity. Moreover, gaining overweight as a result of refusing good deits like protein intake, carbohydrates intake,fibres and so on. For instance, low intake of protein cause to rise the weight. Consequently, people will triggered by obesity is they follow against appropriate deit.

On the other hand, people must aware about their suppliments concern and follow the regular exercise. Consuming food with all the nutritional value shows a better results. Furthermore, participating daily in physical activities like sports,gym, running will burns bad cholesterol. For example, people who follows physical activities are more healthier and fit than non-participants.Hence eating healthier food and burning calories shows better improvement.

To conclude, eating more fat content foods leads to develop overweight.while, people should develop their passions toward health and physical activities.

[ please Evaluate my essay and give band ] thanku!

dear Liz, can you give me a favour? what score can you give me for this essay? Despite environmental concerns raised by scientists, people are not changing their lifestyle. Why is this so? What should be done to encourage people to do more to save the environment? These days, it is becoming increasingly common for scientists to take care of the environment, while citizens tend to ignore this problem. The excessive trust in scientists and the development of this world can be the main reasons behind this issue. However, the situation can be reversed by following the appropriate solutions. To begin with, perhaps the major reason why people are not changing their lifestyle can be the extreme belief of scientists. Since the 20th century, a numerous innovation, which had successfully deal with some problems faced us, has been produced by researchers. Therefore, people may tend to disregard the issues of our habitat and think that scientists will solve these problems. Moreover, the advancement of technic technology, which affects the environment harmfully, such as cars, may not provide us to take caring of habitat. For instance, to delivering crucial items to each other, there is no way to use vehicles. Development may result in persons ignoring their nature. Turning to the possible solutions, the authorities and scientists could raise awareness for people as to why we should focus on the environment. The governments may be funding an advertisement about the importance of habitat and broadcast them on television and the internet. Furthermore, the researcher can organize campaigns about what should we do to tackle environmental problems among the population. If these provisions initiate among society, people will pay attention to not only their habitat but also their actions. To conclude, people’s trust in scientists and the accelerating world are the main reasons behind why people are disregarding the circumstances. Therefore, to tackle this problem, the government and scientists should organize activities about awareness of the surroundings among the people.

Hey Elizabeth, I really appreciate the efforts you put into collective learning Any reader is welcomed to evaluate my Essay, Hope you have a wonderful day 🙂

In a world filled with cherished experience, where god has cast a spell balancing good and evil. Thus, with the copious of malevolent people who stay resilient to jurisdiction, there has been an effective curiosity about how they involved in convicting crimes even after their previous punishments and what measures can we take into account for thwarting the issue. It is glaringly obvious that the limited awareness of one’s actions or sometimes lack of affection in childhood can precipitate such insolent behaviour, thus deep and thorough introspection and a positive environment for children must be encouraged to avoid such conditions. A punishment is incomplete without realizing the consequences of their actions, and thus it is important to believe in the effects of every interaction. On the edge of the materialistic world, the people tend to intentionally ignore or pay a little attention to the corollary of their own actions, and therefore any punishment not involving looking back on themselves is futile. Another major cause of imprudence is caused by childhood trauma or a negative family environment. A study shows that the majority of criminals tend to involve in criminal activities even after atonement if they have been flourished in the dearth of affection. Thus, it makes it clear that the major cause of resilience is the result of limited introspection and uninhabitable childhood experience. Moreover, people should take efforts to fight the malevolent brain to sustain a positive society. Every jurisdiction must include the importance of teaching the problems that victims might have undergone and make them find the mistakes they committed. Moreover, the life of a child begins with a family, thus proper care should be taken by parents to ensure that their child is given sufficient attention and love. Which can guarantee an effective decrease in the crime rate before or after their punishments. To sum up, it is evident that limited awareness and poor family relationships when mixed with the evil mind can bear a resilient criminal, and thus proper steps must be taken into account like teaching the thorough knowledge of introspection and encouraging parents to build and maintain a positive environment at home.

Thanks for sharing. Got a chance to learn more words from your essay.

Hello liz. Your website is not less than a jackpot for persons , who are preparing for ielts exam. I was reading one of your sample essays and now I have 3 interrelated questions.

1) is it important to give examples in each body paragraphs ? ( I am curious to know because you didnot write any examples in that essay)

2) if we donot add examples then can we loose marks?

3) can we make our own examples to add. ( for eg: an article published in “the times” stated that ………. ) or ( A recent study conducted in the USA revealed that ……..)

( I hope my questions are making sense)

You should use examples as you wish and when you wish. you can choose to illustrate your ideas in other ways rather than just with examples. As I said, you can choose to illustrate in other ways. You won’t get a higher score because you give the source of information. This isn’t an university essay. IELTS do not care where the information comes from. So, don’t waste your words on something that won’t increase your score. For the above essay, it would have been possible to add an example of types of crime – ie minor crime and major crime. However, this essay is already very well detailed and explained so it requires nothing more. We often use examples to illustrate a point in more specific detail to facilitate understanding.

Hi Liz I observed that you paraphrased first punishment as prison sentence. The punishment for a crime is not always prison sentence.

It’s important to look at all the words in the sentence and also pay attention to collocations. The verb “serve” relates to prison sentences.

In a few latest comments from almost a year ago, I can see your health hasn’t been so good. I really hope you’re doing well 🙂

Also, if you could please, I have a query- In a Cause/Solution essay, can I organise my points in the below mentioned way or it doesn’t bode well for task response criterion?

Introduction para BP 1 Causes- point 1 + supporting points BP 2 Causes- point 2 + supporting points BP 3 Solution- 2 points and supporting points Conclusion para

I’d like to mention here that I’ve developed both ideas well but in order to avoid making Causes para too long, I broke it down to two body paragraphs.

This organisation is not logical. The causes are 50% of the essay and the solutions are 50% of the essay. However, with your paragraphing, you have given about 66% to causes and 33% to solutions. This is something to avoid. The task given to you will help you plan paragraphs.

Hi dear liz I’m confused, you said Roma’s 3 paragraph structure is wrong while your essay on happiness; the sample essay for direct question type is comprised of 3 paragraphs, first one answers the first question and the second and third ones answer the second question!!!!

In that essay, the first question is simple. However, the second question asks for “factors” (plural) – it needs more space to extend and explain multiple factors.

Dear Mam, Please clarify my confusion about the use of deter in last sentence of 3rd paragraphs. Why it is not “deters”, instead of “deter” ? Another doubt about ” are released are effective” that you used in second line of conclusion. I am unfamiliar about such kind of sentence structure. Please clarify.

You are doing great job mam, Salute!!! Wish you good health.

This is because the sentence in full is: “This solution would hopefully prevent them from taking any chances and would deter them from ….” When we write like this, we do not have to repeat certain words in the second clause. The grammar tense is also ready presumed from the first clause.

Liz. I just found your site, really this is very much informative. So I am really interested reading with this site thank you

Hi Liz, I hope I find you better. I have got a query on the way you paraphrased the background statement. The statement says ‘first punishment’ but you paraphrased it as ‘first prison’. Is it not possible for the first punishment be in other forms such as community service, fine, etc

You are referring to the paraphrase “first prison sentence” which means first punishment in prison. This whole issue is about re-offenders and this is all about prison, not community service. There are no world issues about community service or paying a fine teaching people bad habits which cause them to re-offend. While it isn’t stated, it is presumed. Also the word “serving” is used with prison, not with fines or community service. We do community service and we pay a fine, but we serve a prison sentence.

In the speaking test, this is something you could talk about in part 3. You could dispute the question. The examiner would probably interrupt you and paraphrase it to bring you on topic. In writing task 2, you must understand immediately. Yes, it is true that you need to look at holes in the essay question – ie is this referring to only young children or all children or all people. But with this essay question, it is about prison, not paying a fine.

can we use active voice and passive voice in the same sentence.

please reply me as soon as possible.

It is thought that people will …. That is a passive voice with an active future tense.

Hy Liz. Thank you for your great info on IELTS I am a bit confused about cause , solution and give reasons for your answer. Are the reasons not part of the causes

You have two tasks – causes and solutions. The word “cause” can also be paraphrased as “reason”. The above essay provides causes and solutions – this means the task is completed.

Saddened to hear from you that. How are you now? I pray God to bestow you with all the good health

Thank you for your kind words. I’m still sick, but not as sick as I was a few years ago. I hope this upward trend will continue next year 🙂

My friend and I took our exam about 16 days ago, and finally we got the reault what we wanted(9-8.5-7.5-7). Your videos were extremely beneficial for my writing. Thank u so much. ❤

And the sad part was when I was watching ur videos and your sickness popping to my head… I dont know what u r coping with right now, but Im sure u will conquer it soon. 😍

Best regarda,

Ahmad and Rana

It’s lovely to see both of your results. Very well done to you both 🙂 Thanks for your message about my health. I really hope to be well in a year or so – I have learned the importance of patience and determination which I’m sure many IELTS test takers will be familiar with 🙂

God will touch you with healing hands ! Get well soon!

Dear Ahmad, kindly please send those video to me in order to prepare for my exam after the lock down,i would have been requested for the videos,but the situation here in Nigerian is not palatable.

The videos are available for free on this site. Go to the HOME page and select the part of the test you wish to study for free. You will find free videos, practice exercises, tips, topics, model answers etc etc. OR use the RED MENU BAR at the top of the website to access those sections.

Hi Liz If I write an essay in the comment box, could you please check my writing.

Sorry I don’t offer that service. I like to help but I don’t have time to comment on writing.

Hello dear Liz. I’ ver purchased all your advance videos, yet I wonder why I cant find the vidoes related to cause/solution and direct question essay. Dont you have any videos discussing those two types?

BTW, you are so popular in my country 🙂 ❤

Unfortunately, I became very sick after making those video lessons and my health has not recovered enough since then to make more. I’m hoping later next year I might be able to make videos again, but it isn’t certain. Glad you like my lessons 🙂

Ohhhhhh! 😔😔😔☹☹☹ So sad to hear dear Liz. I really, really hope you get better so soon, and whatever ur problem is gets solved. Next year, which will be after my exam, I’ll be waiting for ur new vidoes, so that I see u r alright 😊

BTW, I’m really excited that u replied🙈😅

Thanks and good luck with your test 🙂

Praying for your health!! you are such a blessing and an excellent teacher.

Liz, you are going to get through this. Let me tell you why. Through your perseverance and your positive mindset, you have become extremely adept at finding solutions to problems that have brought most people down. You’ve aced limitations like these in style and have helped others do so. Moreover, you’ve been a constant guide to a lot of us, giving us the direction, motivation and drive to perform well. We pray and root for your good health knowing full well that our teacher’s going to get a 9 on this test.

All I ask of you is to not lose hope and try to find happiness in every day and carry on being the golden-hearted-ever-smiling-hero that you are!

I don’t know what to say. I’m really touched by your comment. It brought tears to my eyes. Even though I am a very strong, positive person, things have been really tough for me at times and I often wondered if I would survive this struggle. Your comment has given me renewed strength and reinforced my determination to keep fighting for my health. Thank you many times over 🙂 We all of us need positive vibes to keep strong 🙂 Wishing you all the best for 2020!!

hi liz, i hope you get better soon,you always spread happiness and cheerful dear.you has an amazing way in teaching and conveying the information.

Thank you, Kout 🙂

Hi Liz, BIG FAN of your Teachings 🙂 I simple love all your essays, feels like they are written so effortlessly… So very clear, easy to understand, follow and logical! I am in love with the way you write and present the ideas. I have my exam day after tommrow, I hope to write an essay in exam not completely upto your level but at least a bit nearby to get a band 7. Thank you for your valuable lessons and your paid video lessons are super helpful and MUST HAVE…, Thanks again!! Godbless!

I wish you lots of luck in your test!! Make sure you review the linking words: https://ieltsliz.com/linking-words-for-writing/ . A lot of people forget to review their linking words – using them well will help your score. Also review all my last minute tips for each section of the test: https://ieltsliz.com/ielts-help-faq/

Hi Liz, Thanks, surely will read and review that. Also, Thank you so much for your wishes… It means a lot to me 🙂

Dear liz, I see you havent given a single example in this essay, how will it fulfill the task response criteria?

An example using “for example” or “for instance” is not a requirement. There are many ways to illustrate your point without giving direct examples.

Can we use phrases like “ earn our living “ in ielts essays??

What you need to ask yourself is: Is this an informal expression for informal use or is it an expression that is used in a variety of contexts, both serious and informal? Answer that question and you will know if you can use it in writing task 2. If you are ever in doubt during the test, don’t take risks.

Hi Liz, thanks a lot for sharing lots of useful tips and learning resourses! After reading this essay, I wonder if it’s possible to get band 9 in writing without giving any examples? As far as I know, we should always support ideas with examples in Ielts essays. Please help me to clarify this! Thank you!!

Examples are given if or when relevant. They are not a requirement. Also there are many ways to illustrate a point without using a direct example.

Hey miss liz, i was wondering about your writing task 2 videos, you’ve been saying all the time that we should write (mostly everything) in the academic way. Please answer me, does these rules works for the general training exam as well or what shall i do in this situation ?

The GT Essay is the same as the Academic Essay. They are both formal essays with the same marking criteria and scoring. GT essay questions are sometimes easier. But the style is the same – it is formal.

Thank you for the amazing tips. My exam is on 19th July and I am struggling with writing task 2. I am consuming a lot of time in thinking about the ideas and examples, leaving me with no time at the end to review my essay. Could you please review and provide your comments that whether the content is relevant or not, please as I have very less time left to practice. My aim is to score 7.5. Do you think the below essay is good enough for 7.5.

Q: In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Over the past few years, it has been noticed in most of the countries that the limited number of youths are interested in reading newspaper or watching current affairs on TV. There could be different reasons for the raised concern, which I will now discuss in this essay and then I will also provide the corrective measures for combating this issue.

The genesis of this problem lies in social networking sites, which has taken all the eyes of the public and it is not wrong to say that technology has fastened our lives. For instance, the life of the youth has become a challenge nowadays, which i snot just limited to success in career but also to cope up with the changing society in terms of fashion and the increasing desires. They have a lot on their list other than knowing what is happening in their countries. Also in general, most of the content broadcasted on the TV is irrelevant and newspaper have lost its meaning since the advent of the digital market.

To resolve this issue and to make our young blood aware of the importance of the news, it is incumbent to add current affairs as a mandatory subject in schools, colleges as well as in the professional settings. In addition to this, time spent on surfing the internet should be monitored, as it will help them to manage their time efficiently. Above all, the key is to inculcate the feeling of patriotism in the youth so that they could understand the importance of knowing the situation of the country and outside world.

In conclusion, knowing the fact that the majority of the young people fail to understand the necessity of news, it is the utmost responsibility of the elders to make them aware of its consequences. I understand, all news is not relevant but knowledge of current affairs would help in making up the minds for the future.

Thanks a lot for your support.

Hi Ankara, Please watch Liz’s videos on IELTS task2 they are very helpful and many people who have taken their exam rave about them. Good luck and hope this helps.

Hi Liz But the questions say give examples from your own experience. Do we still avoid them?

Examples from your experience does not necessarily mean examples from your private life. It is your experience of the world around you. The examples you give are your choice, but I am recommending that you keep a formal style and tone for your essay.

Hello Liz, Thanks for the tremendous help from your site, it has helped me a lot in my writing. Pls help me check if I paraphrased this topic properly because I think, I kind of over paraphrased it. Topic: Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped?

Introduction: There is an existence of impoverished people all over the nations of the world and each of these nations have adopted various methods in tackling the issues relating to destitute. However, lack of education and bad governance are the key reasons for global hardship, hence, adequate education and good leadership is required to aid the poor.

Yes, you over paraphrased. Keep the meaning clear at all times. Your aim is to produce perfect sentences: Different countries have different methods of tackling poverty. Poverty is caused by……

Hi Liz, In problems and solutions essays, is it fine to write a problem and its solution in first paragraph and then another problem and its solution in second paragraph?

In the case of problem/solution, the problems and solutions are directly linked and it is possible to do that.

Thanks Liz for the clarification.

liz, can i illustrate the causes in two paragraph and write the solution and conclusion on final final paragraph which is basically a conclusion paragraph

The causes are 50% of your essay task and the solutions are 50% of your essay task. If you wish to ignore the instructions and decide the causes are more important, that is your choice. But you will be failing on proper task fulfilment. This is basic common sense. IELTS is all about logical approach.

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IELTS essay, topic: The majority of former prisoners commit further crime after their release (reasons and solutions)

IELTS Essays - Band 9
by Simone Braverman

This is a model response to a Writing Task 2 topic from High Scorer’s Choice IELTS Practice Tests book series (reprinted with permission). This answer is close to IELTS Band 9.

Set 5 Academic book, Practice Test 22

Writing Task 2

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

It is a fact that the majority of people who are sent to prison commit further crime after their release.

What is causing this? What can be done to change this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

Sample Band 9 Essay

It is a sad fact that criminals who leave prison go on to commit further crime. There are various reasons for this, but there are also some things that can be done to prevent it from happening.

One reason for this recidivism is due to a lack of legitimate income. Many people turn to crime as they cannot find an alternative to earn money. When such person comes out of prison, it is very often the case that they have the same few opportunities for a legitimate income. In fact, these opportunities will even be reduced, as employers are often less willing to give an ex-prisoner a job. Some people also return to crime, as they spend all the time of their prison sentence with other criminals. This is not a great environment for rehabilitation, and sometimes even a network of contacts can be made to help develop criminal activities on release.

One important way to help address this problem is education. Criminals who have turned to illegal activities because of no alternatives to earn a living need to learn a way to earn a wage, such as a trade or vocational skills. Computer skills, for example, are in high demand and someone trained in these could very possibly find work. In addition, governments can offer incentives to employers to attract them to give jobs to newly-released prisoners. This would help people who don’t really want to return to crime achieve a fresh start. As keeping people in prison is an expensive business, governments might find it cheaper to pay these incentives.

To sum up, people returning to crime is a tragedy that should be avoided if at all possible in today’s society. Education and incentives can directly address the reasons for it and could make society a happier and safer place.

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It is a sad fact that individuals who are released from prison often go on to commit further crimes. There are various reasons for this, but there are also measures that can be taken to prevent it from happening.

One primary cause of recidivism is the lack of legitimate income opportunities. Many people turn to crime because they cannot find alternative ways to earn money. Unfortunately, even after leaving prison, they often face limited options for legal employment. In fact, their chances may diminish as employers tend to be reluctant to hire ex-prisoners. Additionally, spending time in prison alongside other criminals hinders rehabilitation and can lead to establishing new criminal connections upon release.

Effectively addressing this issue requires a focus on education. Individuals who have resorted to illegal activities due to limited alternatives need access to learn marketable skills or trades that enable them to secure lawful means of earning a living. For instance, providing training in high-demand fields like computer skills could significantly improve their prospects for finding employment opportunities. Furthermore, governments can incentivize employers by offering benefits or rewards for hiring newly-released prisoners. This approach would provide those who genuinely wish not returnto crime with an opportunity for a fresh start. Given the high costs associated with incarceration, governments might find investing in these incentives more cost-effective.

In conclusion, minimizing the recurrence of criminal behavior among former offenders is crucial in our modern society.The solutions lie ineducation and incentives which directly address the root causes behind recidivism while contributing towards creating safer communities where individuals have better opportunities for productive lives.

一个可悲的事实是，从监狱获释的人往往会继续犯下更多的罪行。造成这种情况的原因有很多，但也可以采取一些措施来防止这种情况的发生。累犯的一个主要原因是缺乏合法的收入机会。许多人转向犯罪是因为他们找不到其他赚钱的方法。不幸的是，即使在离开监狱后，他们也经常面临有限的合法就业选择。事实上，由于雇主往往不愿意雇佣前囚犯，他们的机会可能会减少。此外，与其他罪犯一起在监狱里度过的时间阻碍了康复，并可能导致在获释后建立新的犯罪关系。有效解决这一问题需要把重点放在教育上。由于替代方案有限而诉诸非法活动的个人需要学习有市场的技能或交易，使他们能够获得合法的谋生手段。例如，提供计算机技能等高需求领域的培训可以显著改善他们寻找就业机会的前景。此外，政府可以通过为雇佣新获释囚犯提供福利或奖励来激励雇主。这种方法将为那些真正希望不再犯罪的人提供一个重新开始的机会。考虑到监禁的高昂成本，政府可能会发现投资于这些激励措施更具成本效益。总之，在我们的现代社会中，最大限度地减少前科犯犯罪行为的再次发生至关重要。解决方案在于不适当的教育和激励措施，直接解决再犯背后的根本原因，同时有助于创建更安全的社区，让个人有更好的机会过上富有成效的生活。

Here is a list of commonly used words and collocations based on this essay, along with their Chinese translations:

1. Recidivism – 再犯率 2. Commit further crimes – 再度犯罪 3. Released from prison – 出狱 4. Measures to prevent – 预防措施 5. Lack of legitimate income opportunities – 合法收入机会的缺乏 6. Turn to crime – 转向犯罪活动/走上犯罪道路 7. Alternative ways to earn money – 赚钱的替代方法 8. Limited options for legal employment – 有限的合法就业选择权 9.Reluctant to hire ex-prisoners- 不愿雇佣前囚犯 10.Spending time in prison alongside other criminals- 与其他罪犯一起在监禁期间度过 11.Hinders rehabilitation- 妨碍康复 12.Establishing new criminal connections- 建立新的罪恶联系 13.Focus on education 专注于教育 14.Resort to illegal activities 指向非法活动 15.Learn marketable skills or trades 学习有市场价值技能或行业 16.Secure lawful means of earning a living 获取合法谋生手段 17.High-demand fields like computer skills 计算机技能等高需求领域 18.Improve prospects for finding employment opportunities 提高找到就业机会前景 19.Incentivize employers 给雇主提供激励措施 20.Offer benefits or rewards 提供福利或奖励 21.Newly-released prisoners 刚刚释放的囚犯 22.Wish not return to crime 希望不再犯罪 23.Provide an opportunity for a fresh start 提供重新开始的机会 24.Given the high costs associated with incarceration 鉴于关押所带来的高成本 25.Minimizing the recurrence of criminal behavior 减少犯罪行为再次发生 26.Former offenders 前罪犯 27.Crucial in our modern society 在我们现代社会中至关重要 28.Address the root causes behind recidivism 解决再度回归原因 29.Contribute towards creating safer communities 有助于创造更安全的社区 30.Better opportunities for productive lives 更好地创造有意义生活的机会

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Crime and punishment IELTS model essay with vocabulary

Our band nine sample essays give you the opportunity to learn from successful essays that show off the best structure, vocabulary and grammar. This IELTS essay on crime and punishment explores the advantages and disadvantages of harsh punishment for criminals.

band Nine Sample Essay

In some countries, crimes are punished harshly. what are some advantages and disadvantages of this approach.

Several nations have opted to implement a system of strict penalties, such as long jail sentences and execution, for crimes. In this essay, I will explore the advantage that this is a good deterrent with the disadvantage that this harms rehabilitation .

Punitive measures can help deter future crime. If people can see that crimes will be punished harshly, they are far less likely to want to commit a crime . Because people consider risk versus reward before acting, making crime as risky as possible by increasing punishment can stop criminals. Conversely, when countries have light punishments for crimes like shoplifting , people in those countries might feel like it is worth the risk to do these crimes.

However, these strong punishments also increase recidivism by failing to rehabilitate people. One of the main purposes of sending people to prison is to prevent them from committing crimes when they leave; however, making prisons and other punishments too strict works against this purpose. When criminals have a heavily punitive experience, they lose self-confidence and become distrustful of authority , meaning they are more likely to be involved in crime when they leave prison. Alternatively, if prisoners have access to training and support, such as drug rehabilitation programs and anger management classes, they are far more likely to rejoin society in a productive way.

In conclusion, the correct punishment for crimes is a complex issue. On the one hand, strong measures deter crime; on the other hand, the same measures make it more likely for prisoners to reoffend .

crime and punishment vocabulary

Although crime and punishment is a common topic in the IELTS exam, there, thankfully, is not too much vocabulary you need to know for it. Let’s take a look at some of the high level vocabulary in this answer to kick start your learning.